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Amazing Split Test Results! Can You Pick The Winner?

February 14th, 2012 |
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AMAZING SPLIT TESTING RESULTS!

Can You Pick The Winner?

See if you can pick the winning “Subject
line” that got a whopping 54% increased
open & click through rate than the other!

I had an idea that sounded pretty insane …

But I thought I’d give it a go anyway…

The risk of it not working… or being a raving success…

Believe it or not… lies in your hands.

Then I had another ripper idea…

Actually… this next idea kept me up in the wee hours of the morning scribbling hieroglyphics on my trusty bedside notepad.

Ahh… the 3am brain snap ideas! Amazing clarity.

You know, I reckon it’s true… notes taken in the early hours of the morning hardly need editing!

So where was I? Oh yeah… So do you wanna know what my idea is?

I bet you do… but not so fast my eager friend.

I wanna see how this one flies first. Test the waters.

So as most copywriters love to say, “Let me explain”…

It started like this…

First up – I love split testing.

Trying to choose what headline, offer, design, subject line, whatever, will resonate best with the mass market… fascinates me!

It gives the grey cerebral matter between my ears a grilling work out.

I love the challenge of trying to pick the winner!

But believe it not… (This may shock you)…my guesses are not always right!

Weird huh?

Another one of life’s hard-to-grasp mysteries…

Up there with the pyramids.

Anyway. Moving on…

A few weeks back I sent an email out to all my intelligent, marketing savvy subscribers.

The email was pointing to a recent blog post I did.

I thought I’d split test 2 different subject lines.

Subject line (A):

How To Belt A Home Run With Your Next Promotion

Subject line (B):

Open This To See Some Killer Sales Copy Examples

 

It was the same email, just a different subject line.

Now here’s where it gets interesting…

I thought I had a pretty good idea of which one would get a higher open rate.

But this time I was actually wro… wr…wr…wro… wron…

I was in correct.

And yes… I know what you’re thinking…

I checked, and it wasn’t a technical glitch.

Fact was… I had to face defeat.

Think you can do better?

Alright wise guy (or gal)…I’ll give you a chance to guess… Let’s see how YOU go, okay?

Wait. To be fair… you need to know more about the people who are on my email list.

Otherwise your guess will be a blind stab in the dark.

IMPORTANT TO KNOW:

Here’s a realistic snapsh ot profile of my email subscribers. They are…

  • 38% more intelligent than most people
  • 92% better chance of succeeding in life
  • Have a razor sharp marketing mind
  • Dedicated to higher conversions for themselves or clients
  • A mix of copywriters, consultants, coaches, business owners, Internet marketers & speakers
  • Some frustrated employees looking to break free and have more control over their income
  • People I’ve stolen from Pete Godfrey’s list
  • Members of my famous (and underpriced) coaching & mentoring program www.thecopywritingsystem.com
  • Owners of my signature product www.7hoursalesletter.com
  • Secretly wish they were Jack Bauer from 24
  • And one other thing… My accurate statistics prove that their chances of having a massive financial windfall increased by 273% as soon as they joined my list. True story.

All in all…

They’re all fellow “Direct Response Marketing Junkies” with a ravenous appetite for any hints, tips or ideas that’ll boost conversions…

Righty-o, enough rambling…

Now before you skip ahead and test your skills… I want you to promise me you’ll read the second part of this post.

Remember? When I mentioned my crazy idea earlier? Yeah, that part.

I want you to contribute something in the comment box below when this is over.

Don’t’ be scared. If you’re smart, (which you obviously are because you’re reading my blog), then you’ll see the benefit of doing it…

Geeez… I’m pushy aren’t I?

No harm intended… but feel free to feel guilty if you don’t.

Okay, are you ready?

Let’s see how you go…

Pick the winner…

Here are the stats.

One of these subject lines got a:
37.3% open rate – and a 15.8% click rate

The other one got a:
57.4% open rate – and a 23.5% click rate

But which one was it? A or B?

Pick the winner...
Subject line (A):
How To Belt A Home Run With Your Next Promotion
Subject line (B):
Open This To See Some Killer Sales Copy Examples
Question 1 Explanation:

Correct answer was (B)
That’s a massive 54% increase on getting the email opened... and a further 51% of people clicked the link! Worthwhile test? Hell yes!

 

Okay… so how did you go?

But before you get ahead of yourself… remember… no two lists are the same.

What works for my list may not work for yours! The key is to do your own spilt testing!

Which brings me to my next point.

… That idea that’s been rattling around in my skull for a few days…

First up, did you like that I shared my spilt test results with you? Yes or no?

Would you like to see more? Yes or no?

Good. Look, I’m happy to do that… but think about this…

Imagine if you got to see a whole bunch of split test results in one place? Not just from me… but from a whole swag of fellow marketers and copywriters?

Is it only me… or would that be ultra- cool?

Let me unfold my idea more so you can see how it relates to you…

It starts like this… I’m challenging anyone reading this post to contribute and leave their own split testing result in the comment box below.

Be it a… subject line, headline, price test, whatever.

But it starts with you.

No wait. I’ll break the ice first… I’ll put my #1 highest opened subject line below. Just to make you feel better….

But then you’re next, cool?

Relax… You don’t have to show the % stats if you don’t want. Up to you…

This is not an ego-stroking competition. Forget that.

Just a community of fellow savvy marketing fiends sharing and growing together…

What do you reckon… You in or what?

If this works…then you’ll LOVE my next idea!!

Think big. Be different.

Bret Thomson

P.S. If you don’t do split testing or don’t have a business yet… but you enjoyed the post… then don’t keep it to yourself. Let me know below… And spread the love baby!

P.P.S. If you’re not already on my email subscribers… then you’re missing out on all my hot-off-the-press, in-the-trenches, sizzling hot direct response insights. I’ll make it easy for you by letting you join below

And don’t worry. I won’t email you every day. I should. But I don’t. Catchya…

Secret Ingredient For Belting Out A Home Run On Your Next Promotion

January 23rd, 2012 |
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Secret Ingredient For Belting Out A
Home Run On Your Next Promotion

I was chatting to one of my copy-cub students this week. He was struggling with a piece of copy that wasn’t converting.

Couldn’t put his finger on it…

So he asked if I could run my masterful eye over it. He was hoping I could spot the leaking crack that flowed into the dark abyss of lost sales. Smart move.

So I checked it out. And there it was. Staring me in the face like a flashlight stunned Possum in the veggie patch.

You see… everything else in the copy was great. He tapped into the dominant emotion of the market with a crunching headline. Pulled them into a story from the get-go. Dug up all their objections, fears and desires. Transitioned into the solution like a seasoned pro. Drenched the piece with some undeniable proof to back it all up…

But just couldn’t drag them over the line…

So what was missing?

Lucky for you… my soon-to-be-enlightened-conversion-enthusiast… You’re about to find out.

Once I revealed this golden insight with my eager understudy, I thought why not share it here too?

Okay, enough stalling. Brace yourself…

Here’s what the missing ingredient was

He didn’t show them a R.O.I (return on investment).

Big mistake. Huge.

Showing your clients a R.O.I is a critical, powerful weapon to use in your copy to close a sale. Don’t forget this.

Let me show you how. To drive the point home… (You’re gonna love this)… I’ve even added in some examples from a couple of winning sales letters that I’ve personally written. Cool huh?

So let’s kick it off…

Okay, before I get started, let me drill this into your mind one more time so it sticks. Remember this..

Anytime You Can Show Your Prospect A
Return On Investment In Your Copy… DO IT"

In fact, go the extra mile to show them. This is one of the most powerful "copy clicks" you can ever use. Period.

To prove it… The kingpin of direct response copywriting, Dan Kennedy, rates the "ROI click" as one of his top five copy-clicks he uses every time he writes sales copy (as if you need any more convincing than that)

Think about the psychology behind it…

Keeping in mind that the majority of your prospects are secretly looking for reasons NOT to buy from you…

What do I mean? Well, let’s be honest here… Your prospects don’t spring out of bed in the morning looking to spend money with you, right?
Reality check:

If they can get the solution for free,
they’ll take it every time, no question.

So you need to knuckle down and work harder in your copy if you want them to part with their money.
Beware of the dangerous little voice in their head that whispers, "I don’t really need to spend money on this".
It’s your job to silence that voice

Good news is… the ROI click can totally swing them around. If you can demonstrate (as simple as possible) how quickly and easy they can recoup the money they spend with you, then it could seal the deal.

That little voice will now say, "What have I got to lose? I’ll get my money back in X days/months, then I’ll be in front after that"

NOTE: If you hear more then two voices at the same time, please see a doctor immediately or stop smoking those "special" hand-rolled cigarettes.

Moving on… Let me give you an example of a ROI click. Sound okay?

The first example is from an ebook sales letter.

If you’ve seen me present on stage before… or watched my free-gift-DVD "How to write a winning sales letter"… then you may remember this example from the ‘Dog Breeding" letter.

Here’s how I used the "ROI click" for this $27 ebook

How this $27 ebook can make you $30,000

Then I got to thinking… now I know all the facts on dog breeding, and seeing that I LOVE the process…this little $27 ebook could make me some extra cash on the side. My calculations told me I could sell each puppy for around $1000 each, so with a litter of 11, that’s $11,000 for doing something I love.

Then my mind really started ticking over… I could do this several times per year and pocket around $30,000 and stay at home and enjoy life, instead of selling my soul to an unappreciative BOSS!

That example is pretty short and sweet – Probably all that’s needed for a $27 ebook. In hindsight, if I had taken the time to create a visual graph or table showing the profits, then it would convert even more.

Note to self: Go back and add a graph.

Okay, the next example is selling a high priced service for providing leads to financial planners.

As you’ll see, I’ve put a lot more emphasis on diagrams and tables to show the ROI. I’ve ripped out three pages from the letter for you to look at.

There’s a lot of great copy and psychology weaved through this example – so it’ll pay to read the lot. Yes, it’s long, but I had to convince the prospect to part with a lot of money here… so there is a lot more selling and convincing to do, so the copy needs to be longer to make the sale.

Example 1Example 2

Example 3

End of example.

There are stacks of great chunks of copy you can be “inspired” by in the above example. But most of all… look at the powerful demonstration of ROI.
Use it where you can. It works.

Till next time…

Think big. Be different.

Bret Thomson

P.S. Tell me… did you enjoy seeing real examples of some of my copy? Do you wanna see more like this? Let me know by leaving me a comment below. Cheers

Mentoring by Bret for only $49 / week

How To Deal With Blood-Sucking Leeches Disguised As Wanna-Be Clients

June 17th, 2011 |
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How To Deal With Blood-Sucking Leeches
Disguised As Wanna-Be Clients

Trevor

A Tribute Post For
People Fed Up With
Freebie Seekers

 
G’day

Tell me… be honest… was I too harsh with this guy?

Email correspondence pasted below.

Think big. Be different

Bret Thomson

 

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From: Trevor Mulldane
Sent: 26th May 2011 10:48am
To: Bret Thomson
Subject: Urgent copywriting project

 

Hi Bret

 

I saw you speak at a conference last year and I thought I’d give you a chance to write sales copy for my company.

We are launching an exciting piece of software for social media in two weeks time. We have two other copywriters submitting copy for this project. We will spilt-test your sales copy against the others to see which converts best. If your copy is successful, we will then let you write for our future projects. We are happy to pay you for future projects, however this project is just a test to see if you qualify.

Please submit some recent copy samples for me to review ASAP. Also, include your prices for writing a sales letter. Send your samples and prices to my assistant Sharon (Cc’d in this email) by C.O.B tomorrow, then she will send you the project brief.

We will need your first draft by next Friday June 3rd.

Trevor

 

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From: Bret Thomson
Sent: 26th May 2011 11:21am
To: Trevor Mulldane
Subject: Re: Urgent copywriting project

 

Hi Trevor

Thanks for thinking of me, but I’m busy enough right now without writing copy for free.

Re prices: I don’t give out prices without my potential client filling out a detailed questionnaire and phone interview. This is the first step of my essential researching criteria.

I’m happy to send this to you anyway, as it will surely benefit you.

Good luck with your project.

Kind regards

Bret

www.BretThomson.com

 

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From: Trevor Mulldane
Sent: 26th May 2011 11:36am
To: Bret Thomson
Subject: Re: Re: Urgent copywriting project

 

Bret

I don’t have time for quizzes or games.

And frankly, your short sightedness surprises me. You could make a lot of money later on, once this product goes big.

I only contacted you because I saw you speak from stage and you sounded like you knew what you were talking about. Maybe I was wrong?

Send me your current copy examples anyway, and if I think your work is up to scratch, I may give you another chance.

Trevor

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From: Bret Thomson
Sent: 26th May 2011 11:57am
To: Trevor Mulldane
Subject: Re: Re: Re: Urgent copywriting project

 

Hi Trevor

I have to apologise. I didn’t realize we had met. I have to be honest… I’m a little confused. Are you sure it was me you saw speaking on stage?

Because I can’t remember wearing a t-shirt that read, “Feel-free-to-screw-me-over-and-I’ll-kiss-your-ass-for-free”.

Amazing coincidence though… because just this morning I sprung out of bed hoping someone would give me an “opportunity” to exchange my years of experience of writing million-dollar sales copy – for nothing!

Ohhh, sorry, my bad… you did say I may get paid later for a future job. Wow, thank you Mr. Scrooge (so generous).

Next week I had organized a special camping trip with my three sons for some long-overdue father-and-son time… Let me just text my boys and cancel the trip so I can work on your project for free. Oh joy…

Bret
www.BretThomson.com

P.S. If you ever need your house painted (for free)… or help moving heavy furniture, please make sure you ask me first. What an honor that would be.

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From: Trevor Mulldane
Sent: 26th May 2011 12:05pm
To: Bret Thomson
Subject: Re: Re: Re: Re: Urgent copywriting project

 

I will over look your smart-ass attempt of being funny and give you one last chance to be a part of this.

You obviously have no idea how much money this software launch will make.

Send me recent copy examples and prices ASAP or we will move forward without you.

Trevor

 

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From: Bret Thomson
Sent: 26th May 2011 12:28pm
To: Trevor Mulldane
Subject: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Urgent copywriting project

 

 

Hi Trevor

I’m sorry. Thanks for giving me a second chance for you to suck the bone marrow from my copywriting soul.

As requested, here are my most recent copy examples:

 

“They All Laughed When I Sat Down To Write Copy For Trevor
Because He’s Too Tight To Pay…”

 

“Give Me Just 3 Hours Working With Trevor
And He’ll Happily Milk Me As Dry As A Camels
Arse In A Sandstorm – Guilt Free – Guaranteed”

 

“Who Else Wants To Sell Their Soul To A
Knob-Jockey That Blatantly Exploits Talented
People To Selfishly Line His Own Pockets?”

 

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From: Trevor Mulldane
Sent: 26th May 2011 12:34pm
To: Bret Thomson
Subject: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Urgent copywriting project

 

Bret

You obviously don’t have the brains or maturity to comprehend the scope of what we are doing.

I only work with professionals, not idiots like yourself.

Trevor

 

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From: Bret Thomson
Sent: 26th May 2011 12:39pm
To: Trevor Mulldane
Subject: jection

 

Hi Trevor

I am so mature.

You’re not – times a hundred!

No, wait… a MILLION!

 

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From: Trevor Mulldane
Sent: 26th May 2011 12:42pm
To: Bret Thomson
Subject: Re: jection

 

I’m not even going to give you the pleasure in responding.

 

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From: Bret Thomson
Sent: 26th May 2011 12:44pm
To: Trevor Mulldane
Subject: Re: Re: jection

 

But you just did.

 

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From: Trevor Mulldane
Sent: 26th May 2011 12:46pm
To: Bret Thomson
Subject: Re: Re: Re: jection

 

Fuck off.

 

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So again… was I too harsh?
Go ahead and leave a comment below – don’t be shy ;)

Think big. Be different…

Bret Thomson

 

 

Bret’s Copywriting Questionnaire Extraordinaire!

June 15th, 2011 |
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OK here it is. As promised…

The Copywriting Questionnaire Extraordinaire!

I originally got this questionnaire from Pete Godfrey – who in turn probably got it from Dan Kennedy – who in turn probably got it from GOD!!

Okay, let’s get cracking…

I’m going to cut straight to the chase.

To write a kick ass sales letter you have to know your ideal client “intimately” – meaning you almost have to know what kind of ‘pillow talk’ is happening!

Don’t take that the wrong way, but if you can really understand what makes your prospect tick… as closely as you do your own partner… then your copy will make an instant emotional connection!

This may sound weird – but I try and “become my client” – walk in their shoes – think like they think – feel like they feel.

And that’s where this questionnaire comes in. It’s your ticket to what’s going on in their mind.

Right, so what you need to do now is read through the questionnaire below and then use it for your own research.

For bonus points see if you can pick up on the psychology that underlines this questionnaire!

I’ve made comments for you in red – my prospects obviously wouldn’t be seeing the red comments. They are just for you, okay?

I won’t keep you hanging any longer. Here it is…

Note: If you want to print off your own version then click here

If you want to see a real ‘filled out’ and completed version then click here

Bret’s Copywriting Questionnaire:

  1. Who is your main prospect? (Men? Women? Ages? Career? And so on…)

Bret’s note in red: I always try and picture a real person that I actually know as the ideal prospect. This makes it easier for me to understand how they think and how they’ll react to certain things. It’s a very, very powerful advanced technique (and easy to do!).

  1. For me to get to know your prospects inside out so I can motivate them to take action now, I really need to be able to see them. Below are eleven profiling questions… just do your best on these remembering the more info I’ve got the better (and please don’t just guess).

 

1)    What keeps them awake at night?

2)    What are they afraid of?

3)    What are they angry about? Who are they angry at?

4)    What are their top 3 daily frustrations?

5)    What trends are occurring and will occur in their businesses or lives?

6)    What do they secretly, ardently desire most?

7)    Is there a built in bias to the way they make decisions? (Example: engineers = analytical)

8)    Do they have their own language? If so give examples of words and phrases they use.

9)    Who else is selling them something similar and how?

10) What magazines do they read?

11) What websites do they visit?

The list above is the backbone for connecting with your prospect on an emotional level. Especially the first 4 questions.

  1. Who are the secondary prospects? Are there enough prospects in the secondary niche to create special target copy versions that appeal directly to them? (Please apply the eleven profiling questions above to these secondary prospects.)
  2. What is your goal for this project?
  3. What other goals would you like to achieve with this project?
  4. Is there anything about your product or company that will lend credibility to your sales pitch? This might include awards you’ve won, how long you have been in business, testimonials, how many locations you have, etc. (Please supply testimonials.)

This is important to weave into your copy as it increases believability and trust.

  1. What product or service will you be selling? If possible please send me your product for evaluation.
  2. What are all the features of your product/ service? Don’t leave anything out… put down everything that you can. This may take some time though it will be well worth it.
  3. What relevant facts or figures have been gathered about your product? Have any studies been made that provide facts and figures that will substantiate your claims? Is there any industry trade council that can give you meaningful facts, graphs, charts and statistics about your products? How does it compare to your competitors product?
  4. What are the major benefits that your customer gets from your product or service? The difference between a fact/feature and a benefit is this: A fact/feature is something your product/service DOES…whereas the benefit is something it DOES FOR your customer.

If you want to take it one step further, then turn the benefits into feelings. That’s worth repeating: turn the benefits into the feelings they will experience! Got it? Good!

  1. What makes your product/service unique? Why should your prospect choose your business over any other? (N.B This question is very important… from it, we will be able to position your business in the market place… we can then develop our U.S.P.- Unique Selling Proposition)
  2. What type of guarantee do you offer?

The scarier the guarantee the better! For example: 200% double your money back guarantee!

  1. What level of service and support do you offer?
  2. Please send me copies of any previous and current marketing pieces including: sales letters, advertisements, brochures and testimonials from satisfied customers; along with any articles on your business, such as marketing plans, etc.

Find out what has worked and what hasn’t in the past.

  1. I want you to sell me on your product/service. Pretend I am sitting across from you… now sell me!

It always pays to interview them for this question and record the dialog!

  1. Have you got a list of feedback questions about your product? This way I can build a FAQ sheet in with your sales document. I’ve proved it many times that by including a FAQ sheet you get more sales.
  2. What’s the price of your product?
  3. How will you take orders? Please give details and phone numbers if required.
  4. What magazines or publications are you going to advertise in? Please send me samples of such magazines.

Then you can see how to make your advertising stand out from the crowd!

  1. What’s my brief? What do you want me to create? A lead generation ad? Complete sales letter? Please be clear on this point.
  2. What’s your offer? What are you going to offer as an incentive to your prospects?
  3. If web copy is required, what are your keywords?
  4. What is your current sales process? Please explain how you get prospects and also how you close the sale. (For example: newspaper ads that send prospects to your store; lead generating followed up with sales pack that sells the product.)
  5. This is a big one: in your opinion why would your prospects NOT buy what you’re offering? List as many of these reasons as you can. Is it the price? That they don’t trust you? List them all, what reasons are there NOT to buy?

This is critically important to weed out every single objection

  1. If you are in a mature market such as weight loss, what changes (if any) have occurred in this industry in the last few years?
  2. What is your marketing budget?

 

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Think big. Be different…

The TOP 4 Ways to Learn More Than An Eavesdropper At A Gossip Convention!

June 13th, 2011 |
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OK. Hot on the tail of my last post about research and Why Pro-Copywriters Get Paid The BIG BUCKS! I’ve compiled here for you…

The TOP 4 Ways to Learn More
About Your Audience Than An
Eavesdropper At A Gossip Convention!

Let’s get right to it shall we?

  1. 1. Interview

This is a good one. I like to jump on the phone or on Skype and record an interview with my client. Then after the interview I ask my client if they have an ideal customer that I could interview. In both cases I get the recordings transcribed into print (I’ve got a great transcriber if you’re after one) and this gives me awesome usable chunks of copy to slot straight into my sales letter.

You may even want to ring up someone who is in your target audience and take them out for lunch! Who knows… just one sentence could give you the emotional twist that will make all the difference!

  1. 2. Forums

Here’s where you get do to some good sleuthing! Jump on the net and check out some of the online forums for your subject/industry. See what common questions are being asked, what concerns are popping up, what arguments are going on. Forums are a powerful resource for getting insights into how you’re audience are feeling.

  1. 3. Youtube

Another great resource for researching. Type in keywords related to your subject and there’s bound to be a stack of people standing on their soap box having their say and wanting their 15 seconds of fame! Try it – I’ve used it with great results!

  1. 4. Survey

Create a survey that goes out to your target audience. Creating an online survey is simple and basic these days through www.surveymonkey.com. You can ask questions about price points, expectations, dislikes, frustrations, the works! Keep it as short as possible and try and throw in a free bonus gift as a reward for filling the survey out.

Okay, that’s all for today. Make sure you put this to the test – you won’t be disappointed.

And next post, as promised…My Copywriting Questionnaire Extraordinaire!

Bye for now….

Think big. Be different…

Bret